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The pie chart below shows the percentage of people aged 23-65 in different occupations in one UK town (Ashby) and in the UK as a whole in 2008.

The pie chart below shows the percentage of people aged 23-65 in different occupations in one UK town (Ashby) and in the UK as a whole in 2008.
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The two pie charts compare the professions occupied by the citizens in one of the towns in the
UK
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 (Ashby) and the
UK
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 as a whole in 2008.
Overall
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, the top three famous occupations in Ashby are personal service,
office
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work
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, and construction
work
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.
On the other hand
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, the
UK
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 as a whole has technical
work
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, personal service and the highest percentage is
office
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work
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.
According to
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 the information in Ashby town people likely
work
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 in personal services at 21%
then
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office
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work
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 at 18% and construction at 16%, Moving fouther, Unemployed and shop
work
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 are pretty equal at 14% and the lowest percentage are professional
work
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 and technical
work
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 by 8% and 9%. In the whole
UK
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, people likely to
work
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 at an
office
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 workers 19% is the highest ratio,
then
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 technical
work
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 and personal service both at 17%, Moving
further
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, professional
work
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 is14%, shop
work
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 at 13% and both construction
work
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 and unemployed
work
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 is 10%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, office, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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