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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts showed how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts below illustrate the information on the police
budget
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 spent for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. In 2017, three-fourths of the
budget
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 given by the government was spent towards salaries among the officers and staff. Followed by 17% used on buildings and transport, and
lastly
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, 8% was wasted on the development of technology. In 2018, the
budget
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 spent on salaries decreased by 6% to only 69% left out of the whole
budget
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. The funds were allocated to technology development, which underwent a slight rise from 8% to 14%.
Last
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 but not least, the amount of money wasted on building and transport remained the same at 17%. In correlation to the table, in 2017, the majority of the funding was provided by the national government up to 175,5
million
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pounds
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.
Next,
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local taxes with 91,2
million
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pounds
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, and
finally
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, other sources of 38
million
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pounds
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, with a grand total of 304,7
million
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pounds
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.
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, in 2018, the amount of money given by the government experienced a slight increase of 2.3
million
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pounds
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 bringing it up to 277,8
million
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pounds
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. Moving forward, a massive leap of 11,1
million
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 from local taxes, and the
last
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, a slight rise from other sources of 0,5
million
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pounds
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 bringing it up to 38,5
million
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pounds
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, implying the grand total up to 318,6
million
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pounds
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, 13,7
million
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 higher than the previous year.
To sum up
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, in 2017, the majority of the
budget
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 had to be spent on salaries
due to
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 the high number of employees.
On the contrary
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, in 2018, the total of
the
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workers had decreased, enabling research and development to get more funding compared to the previous year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, lastly".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, million, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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