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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features
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The given line graph compares the percentage of the
population
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 in Asian countries between 1970 and 2020 with predictions for 2030-2040.
It is clear that
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 the proportion of people increased in each country over the
period
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 shown.
Overall
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, Malaysia has the highest percentage of the
population
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,
while
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 there will be fewer citizens in Thailand. Now, turning to the details, in the early 1970s Malaysia and
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the Philippines
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 had the almost same proportion of the
population
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, 30%.
However
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, after 10 years
this
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 statistic changed. The
population
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 of Malaysians increased from 1970 to 2040. It will be 80%
at the end
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 of the
period
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. Meanwhile, in
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, it remained stable in 1980. After another 10 years, it increased slightly and fell again to about 45% in 2010. It is predicted that the
population
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 of
Philippines
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the Philippines
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 people will rise and achieve 50% in 2040. It can be seen that Thailand and Indonesia had the same trend, representing almost 15% in 1970. The proportion of Indonesian people increased gradually to 60%
at the end
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 of the
period
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 shown.
Also
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, the
population
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 in Thailand will go up over the
period
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 and it will be 45% in 2040, which is the lowest percentage compared with other Asian countries.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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