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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the bar chart illustrates the proportion of households who live in their own rented
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accomodation
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accommodation
 in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
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, these countries saw a rise in
home ownership
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homeownership
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 but experienced a decrease in rentals. From 1918 to 1971, there was a higher percentage
in
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of
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 rented
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accomodation
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accommodation
 than those
in
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of
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 owned
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accomodation
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accommodation
 until 1971 both figures were equal. In 1918, almost 80% of households were in rented houses
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 over 20% owned their places.
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, rentals decreased from around 80% to approximately 60% between 1918 and 1961
while
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 there was an increase in owned residential properties from 20% to 40% during the same period of time. In the next 40 years, the figure for
those owned
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that owned accomodation
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accomodation
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 outnumbered
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those
thoses
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those
 in rented
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accommodation
accomodation
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accommodation
, increasing by 10% to 60% in 1981 and reaching a peak at about 70% in 2001 before dropping to
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around
arround
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around
 65% in 2011.
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, the percentage of those in rented
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accomodation
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accommodation
 decreased gradually from 50% in 1981 to its lowest point at 30% in 2001 before rising to around 35% in 2001.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words accomodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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