The graph below shows the percentage of adults whose healthcare need went unmet in the past year from 2008 to 2022 in 6 different European nations. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make coparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of adults whose healthcare need went unmet in the past year from 2008 to 2022 in 6 different European nations.

Summarise the information by selecting  and reporting the main features, and make coparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the rate of adults
that
Correct pronoun usage
who
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did not care about their
heath
Correct your spelling
health
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between the
years
2008 and 2022 in 6 European nations. In brief, We can demonstrate that each
sectors
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sector
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applied a specific change during the
years
. Education fluctuated as health had a massive increase and defence decreased significantly. Starting off with health, it applied a slight increase in the
years
1955 and 1979 as it
then
rose considerably till the year 2019 at approximately a quarter. Education had a variation change throughout the
years
, it did not apply any increase
nor
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or
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decrease. Defence was really important
at
Change preposition
in
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the year 1955 it was roughly one quarter as it
drop
Wrong verb form
dropped
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to almost 10%
then
fluctuates
Wrong verb form
fluctuated
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the
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in the
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coming 3
years
,
then
decreases
Wrong verb form
decreased
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again.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unmet healthcare needs
  • Percentage of adults
  • Trend analysis
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Comparative overview
  • Consistent patterns
  • Economic status
  • Healthcare systems
  • Policy changes
  • Anomalies in data
  • Year-by-year comparison
  • Rising/declining trend
  • Evaluate improvements
  • External factors
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