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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate the proportion of UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not
engaed
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engaged
engage
into
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in
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 full-time
work
 after
gratuated
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graduated
 from university in 2008.
Overall
,the
number
 of two categories (graduated and postgatuated)
studens
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students
student
,who decided to
continued
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continue
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 study
are
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is
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 the most (29,655 and 2,725 respectively).
While
,
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apply
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 voluntary
work
 was recorded
the
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as the
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 minimum
number
 of volunteers.
Initially
, the UK graduates who decided to be in part-time
work
 ,
they
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apply
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were record
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were recorded
were recording
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 (17,735) almost half
number
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the number
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 of
student
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students
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 who
in
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are in
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further
 study .
In addition
, the total
number
 of
unemployment
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unemployed
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 UK
citizen
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citizens
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 (16,235). The total of
voluntrees
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volunteers
 who finished their
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bachelors
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reach
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reached
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 3,500
person
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people
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.
Seconaly
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Secondly
, the
number
 of postgraduates who
enroled
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enrolled
 in
part time
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part-time
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job
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jobs
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 (
2,335
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was 2,335
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) ,which is almost near
by
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apply
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the total of students who
choosed
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chose
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 to
further
 study (2,725).
Furthermore
, more than one thousand and half of
stidents
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students
 in
this
 category stay without any job.
Also
,
depend
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depending
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 on the graph only 345 ones decided to
sharing
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share
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 their time in
voluntaries
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volunteer
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work
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words work, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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