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The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 to three London museums (
British
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Museum
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, Science
Museum
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, and Natural History
Museum
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), in the period from June to
September
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 2013.
Overall
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,the
visitors
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 to the
British
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Museum
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 were the most all over the given period of time,
while
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 the Science
Museum
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 attracted the fewest
visitors
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 over the period.
In addition
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, the three Museums were witnessed increasing
at the end
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 of the time given
Firstly
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, the graph shows that the
British
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Museum
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 experienced fluctuations and reached its peak in July (around 750,000)
visitors
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.
Furthermore
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, in August the
number
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 of
visitors
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 to the
British
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Museum
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 decreased to 500,00. After that in
September
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 rose again to approximately 650,000.
Secondly
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, the Natural History
Museum
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 had a dramatic decline from more than 500,00
visitors
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 in June to almost 400,000
visitors
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 in July. After that, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 increased to more than 450,000 in
September
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.
Finally
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,The Science
Museum
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 had a consistent decrease from June to August when the
Museum
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 recorded the lowest
number
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 of
visitors
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 300,000.
Then
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, the
number
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 of attracted
visitors
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 reached ( around 450,000 in
September
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, british, museum, september with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • illustrates
  • number of visitors
  • museums
  • from June to September 2013
  • the British Museum
  • the Natural History Museum
  • the Science Museum
  • overall trend
  • attracted
  • the most visitors
  • fewest visitors
  • peak
  • experienced fluctuations
  • decline
  • highlight
  • dominance
  • consistent decline
  • minor resurgence
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