The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site.
The map shows
the
Norbiton town Correct article usage
apply
where
was developed as Correct word choice
which
industrial
Add an article
an industrial
area
, and it is future Use synonyms
plan
to Fix the agreement mistake
plans
developing
Wrong verb form
develop
this
Linking Words
area
. There have been several Use synonyms
change
in Change to a plural noun
changes
replace
factory buildings become houses, adding more space for public facilities, and Change the verb form
replacing
build
more roads for access.
Wrong verb form
building
In
Change preposition
At
the
present, the industrial site has Correct article usage
apply
single
road to access the site. The architectures were built for factories in the middle of the Add an article
a single
the single
area
. It was built neither for houses nor public spots. The region was Use synonyms
seprated
by Correct your spelling
separated
river
with farmland in the north. There Add an article
the river
a river
still
more space that does not develop yet.
The future Add a missing verb
is still
plan
of Fix the agreement mistake
plans
this
Linking Words
area
are shown with different Use synonyms
landscape
. The Fix the agreement mistake
landscapes
factories
sites will Fix the agreement mistake
factory
replace
by Wrong verb form
be replaced
houses cluster
. The Fix the agreement mistake
house clusters
area
will develop by Use synonyms
take
more space for public facilities Change the verb form
taking
such
as Linking Words
Correct article usage
a hospital
hospital
, Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
school
, Fix the agreement mistake
schools
playgorund
, Correct your spelling
playgrounds
shops
. Correct word choice
and shops
Base
on that plan, the development will add more road Wrong verb form
Based
route
* where Fix the agreement mistake
routes
scope
Correct article usage
the scope
all
Change preposition
of all
region
of the Fix the agreement mistake
regions
area
. Use synonyms
Linking Words
This activities
will spread housing Change the determiner
This activity
These activities
at
farmland in the north by Change preposition
on
build
Replace the word
building
road
and Fix the agreement mistake
roads
bridge
to cross the river. In conclusion, the development of Norbiton town will convert industrial Fix the agreement mistake
bridges
Use synonyms
area
to Housing and public facilities in the future.Fix the agreement mistake
areas
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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