The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site.
The map shows
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Norbiton town
where
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was developed as
industrial
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an industrial
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area
, and it is future
plan
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to
developing
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this
area
. There have been several
change
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in
replace
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factory buildings become houses, adding more space for public facilities, and
build
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more roads for access.
In
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the
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present, the industrial site has
single
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a single
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road to access the site. The architectures were built for factories in the middle of the
area
. It was built neither for houses nor public spots. The region was
seprated
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separated
by
river
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the river
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with farmland in the north. There
still
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more space that does not develop yet. The future
plan
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plans
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of
this
area
are shown with different
landscape
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landscapes
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. The
factories
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factory
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sites will
replace
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by
houses cluster
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house clusters
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. The
area
will develop by
take
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more space for public facilities
such
as
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a hospital
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hospital
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hospitals
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,
school
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schools
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,
playgorund
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playgrounds
,
shops
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and shops
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.
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on that plan, the development will add more road
route
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routes
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* where
scope
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all
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region
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regions
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of the
area
.
This activities
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will spread housing
at
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farmland in the north by
build
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building
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road
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roads
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and
bridge
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bridges
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to cross the river. In conclusion, the development of Norbiton town will convert industrial
area
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areas
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to Housing and public facilities in the future.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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