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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart demonstrates how often individuals who lived in the USA enjoyed fast
food
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 eateries between 2003 and 2013.
Overall
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, the percentage of
people
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 who ate at fast
food
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 restaurants once a week was highest in 2006 and it of individuals who went there every day was smallest in 2006 and 2013. In 2013, the ratio of citizens who enjoyed meals at
food
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 stalls every day was quite small, which was nearly 5 per
cent
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.
However
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, in 2006 and 2013, the percentage of
this
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 group decreased and stayed at about 3 per
cent
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. With
people
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 who ate fast meals several times a week in 2003, it had a quite high per
cent
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, which was about 15 per
cent
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. In 2006, it increased fast but went down in 2013, which reached roughly 20 and 15 rates respectively. The number of citizens who did it once a week went up slightly from about 30 to 35 proportion between 2006 and 2013
then
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 fell down to 27 percent. With a group of
people
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 who ate here once or twice a month, the percentage of citizens decreased remarkably
then
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 reached a peak, which was 25, and 37 per
cent
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 respectively.
Moreover
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, the number of
people
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 who enjoyed meals in fast
food
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 stalls was above 10 per
cent
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 in 2003 and stayed at 15 per
cent
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 in 2006 and 2013.
In contrast
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, it was 5 per
cent
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 and stayed at under 5 per
cent
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 in 2006 and 2013.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fast food consumption
  • dining frequency
  • decade overview
  • trend analysis
  • to dine out
  • fluctuation
  • sharp increase
  • gradual decline
  • eating habits
  • statistical comparison
  • consuming pattern
  • noteworthy change
  • anomaly
  • periodic comparison
  • data interpretation
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