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The chart below shows the value of one country`s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country`s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The visual diagram
iluustrates
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illustrates
 the value of exports in a country in different groups in 2015 and 2016
also
 the table shows the
amount
 of change in every group of exports in 2015 and in
comparision
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comparison
 with 2016.
Petroleom
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Petroleum
products
 were the biggest number in 2015 and
Textiels
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Textiles
were the
litelest
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littlest
amount
 in these two years. The number of petroleum
products
 by almost
mor
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more
 than 60
bilions
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billion
were
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was
show examples
 the hugest by only 3% of
changes
 in both of
these year
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this year
these years
show examples
also
 the percentage of Engineered goods
were
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was
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 close to
this
prouduct
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product
 by approximately 8.5%. Gems and jewellery were more than 40 per cent by 5.18% of
changes
 in 2015
1nd
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1st
show examples
also
 2016. Agricultural
products
 were almost the same by more than 30
percent
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per cent
show examples
 and the
amount
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number
show examples
 of
changes
 by 0.81%. The Textitles were more than 30 per cent in 2016
however
this
amount
 in 2015
were
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was
show examples
 around 25% by 15.24% which is less than a quarter in
changes
. The percentage
between
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of
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 all of the
product
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products
show examples
 in both years
were
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was
show examples
almoust
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almost
in
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at
show examples
 the same level by a
littele
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little
changes
Fix the agreement mistake
change
show examples
 which is seen just in textiles, gems and jewellery, engineered goods and just a little in
the
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apply
show examples
petroleum
products
that is
 not a lot.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, products, changes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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