The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate student who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate student who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The first bar diagram shows four types of endeavour of
UK
graduates
who did not take a full-time job in 2008. The
later
Correct your spelling
latter
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displays the same topic but for the
UK
postgraduates.
Overall
, applying for
further
study is the most popular
answers
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answer
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for
UK
graduates
with 29,665 students. Comes in second place is Part-time
work
with 17,735
graduates
being
number
Correct article usage
the number
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two
of
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apply
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endeavour that the
graduates
took after
graduate
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graduating
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from university. Unemployment
become
Wrong verb form
became
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number three with 16,235
graduates
, which is slightly lower than part-time
work
. The least desirable endeavour for
graduates
is voluntary
work
with only 3,500 in numbers.
This
trend
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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also
happened for
UK
postgraduates,
which
Correct word choice
where
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further
study
become
Wrong verb form
became
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the number one option with 2,725 in numbers. Similar
with
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to
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the
graduates
Change to a genitive case
graduate's
graduates'
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data, part-time
job
Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
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is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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also
come
Wrong verb form
came
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in second place with 2,535 students
took
Wrong verb form
taking
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this
option.
Moreover
, unemployment is in the third position with 1,625 postgraduates and the
last
position is still voluntary
work
with only 345 people.
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