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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps below illustrate information about the industrial district in Norbiton now and in the future. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective, it is readily apparent that it is planned to change the function of
this
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 district from industrial
into
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to
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 residential usage
due to
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 the transformation of all factories into houses. In terms of transformation, it is evident that a part of
farmland
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the farmland
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 which is located across the river will be replaced with a house.
In addition
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, some companies will undergo transformation into amenities which will be the
school
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schools
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 and shops. Looking from
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the constructing
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constructing
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 and remaining perspective, it is planned to build a new small square and keep the old one as well.
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, a street
where
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that
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 will be surrounded by residential buildings will stretch into
north-west
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the north-west
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 side of the available square.
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, a medical
center
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centre
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 and playground will be built between the available and
new
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newly
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 planned square, and
left
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the left
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 side of
schools
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the schools
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, respectively.
Consider
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Considering
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 the remaining part,
river
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the river
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 will
be remained
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remain
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,
however
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, a bridge will be constructed over the river.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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