The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.

The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.
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bar chart illustrates the percentage of
children
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based on age who go to school with
a different kinds
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different kinds
a different kind
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of
vehicle
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vehicles
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in the UK within a period of a year.
Overall
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, The highest
rate
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of
children
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have a tendency to walk can be seen for 0-1 miles
while
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the opposite can be observed over 2-5.
To begin
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with, the
rate
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of
children
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walking to school for 0-1 was 90% and
this
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figure shows that most of the
children
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like to walk at low distances. the number of walking by 1-2 was recorded at 60 per cent and
this
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number decreased significantly for 2-5 to get to over 20%. For the bicycle, 0-1 and 2-5
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were
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quite similar at 50 and 48 per cent, respectively
while
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1-2 miles had the most
popular
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popularity
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in
this
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category by over 75%. The percentage of cars section showed not many
children
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like to use the car for going to school for all of the distances. the highest
rate
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of using
car
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a car
the car
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can be seen at 30% for 2-5 miles. The more noticeable feature is that
bus
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the bus
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had the lowest
rate
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of
utilizing
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utilisation
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than the other categories.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words children, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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