The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.

The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.
The
given
Verb problem
apply
show examples
bar chart illustrates the percentage of
children
based on age who go to school with
a different kinds
Correct the article-noun agreement
different kinds
a different kind
show examples
of
vehicle
Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
show examples
in the UK within a period of a year.
Overall
, The highest
rate
of
children
have a tendency to walk can be seen for 0-1 miles
while
the opposite can be observed over 2-5.
To begin
with, the
rate
of
children
walking to school for 0-1 was 90% and
this
figure shows that most of the
children
like to walk at low distances. the number of walking by 1-2 was recorded at 60 per cent and
this
number decreased significantly for 2-5 to get to over 20%. For the bicycle, 0-1 and 2-5
have
Verb problem
were
show examples
quite similar at 50 and 48 per cent, respectively
while
1-2 miles had the most
popular
Replace the word
popularity
show examples
in
this
category by over 75%. The percentage of cars section showed not many
children
like to use the car for going to school for all of the distances. the highest
rate
of using
car
Add an article
a car
the car
show examples
can be seen at 30% for 2-5 miles. The more noticeable feature is that
bus
Correct article usage
the bus
show examples
had the lowest
rate
of
utilizing
Replace the word
utilisation
show examples
than the other categories.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words children, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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