The chart below gives information about the journey to school by children aged 11 to 16 in the UK in a year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Your report should comprise a minimum of 150 words.
The
given
bar chart illustrates the percentage of Verb problem
apply
children
based on age who go to school with Use synonyms
a different kinds
of Correct the article-noun agreement
different kinds
a different kind
vehicle
in the UK within a period of a year.
Fix the agreement mistake
vehicles
Overall
, The highest Linking Words
rate
of Use synonyms
children
have a tendency to walk can be seen for 0-1 miles Use synonyms
while
the opposite can be observed over 2-5.
Linking Words
To begin
with, the Linking Words
rate
of Use synonyms
children
walking to school for 0-1 was 90% and Use synonyms
this
figure shows that most of the Linking Words
children
like to walk at low distances. the number of walking by 1-2 was recorded at 60 per cent and Use synonyms
this
number decreased significantly for 2-5 to get to over 20%.
For the bicycle, 0-1 and 2-5 Linking Words
have
quite similar at 50 and 48 per cent, respectively Verb problem
were
while
1-2 miles had the most Linking Words
popular
in Replace the word
popularity
this
category by over 75%. The percentage of cars section showed not many Linking Words
children
like to use the car for going to school for all of the distances. the highest Use synonyms
rate
of using Use synonyms
car
can be seen at 30% for 2-5 miles.
The more noticeable feature is that Add an article
a car
the car
bus
had the lowest Correct article usage
the bus
rate
of Use synonyms
utilizing
than the other categories.Replace the word
utilisation
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