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The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pie charts below show total world energy consumption and electricity generation for last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie chart
display
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 the comparison of the total
energy
 consumption and the
electricity
generation
 in the
pervious
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previous
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 year.
According to
 the data, coal was the biggest source of
electricity
generation
,
while
 oil
was
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consumed the most of
world
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energy
 usage, which was significantly higher than
electricity
generation
. Notably, Gas represented less than 1% of change in both categories. Combustible renewable&waste was not used for
electricity
generation
. 34.4% of global
energy
 was sourced
by
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 oil, which was the highest proportion of total world's
energy
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total energy
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 consumption. Coal and Gas grabbed the second and the third at 25.1% and 20.9%.
In other
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 sources,
such
 as combustible renewable&waste, nuclear, hydro and
other
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, ranged from 10.6% to 0.4%. For
electricity
generation
, coal accounted for 39.8% of
world's
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 power production, which was higher than the consumption of coal. Gas was the second highest
electricity
 generated source. Hydro and Nuclear showed nearly a similar proportion of
electricity
generation
, at 16.1% and 15.7% respectively.
However
, only 6% of
oil
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 was used in
electricity
generation
, which was far lower than
the
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global
energy
 usage.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, electricity, generation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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