The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel’s customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

The charts below show the results of a questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel’s customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.
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The presented pie charts provide information regarding how Parkway Hotels visitors rated the hotel's
customer
service based on asking the same questions of around 100 guests.
Overall
, at the beginning of the period, excellent contributed the least to the
rate
of hotel services ,
while
satisfactory was the most significant
customer
rate
.
At the end
of the period, the good state became the largest part of the
customer
satisfaction
rate
,
whereas
, the lowest contribution was made by the very poor. In 2005, the excellent sector accounted for 5% of
customer
service and experienced a nearly sixfold increase to about one-third of the whole in 2010.
In addition
, the number of customers who were good with services was 14% at the beginning and
this
figure had significant growth and reached 39%
at the end
of these 10 years. The most fallen among these figures belongs to satisfactory with 28% decreased (from 45% to 17%) during
this
given time. In 2005, the amount of satisfied customers that were poor and very poor related to
customer
rate
was 21% and 15% respectively and both decreased after 5 years and reached 12% and 4%.
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