The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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statisctic
of mankind who intake fruits and Correct your spelling
statistic
statistics
vegies
in a five Correct your spelling
veggies
portion
in a day in the United Kingdom from 2001 to 2008. Fix the agreement mistake
portions
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year
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, later, took a bit downfall in next
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the next
two
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more than 20%. Meanwhile, Change preposition
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children
hold
around 16% and 11%. In Wrong verb form
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the next
two
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years,
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the female
consume
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year
by year
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2004, Drametically
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toddler came up with action and increase around more than 5%. Both gender
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respectively
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percent
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males
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females
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the milestone by crossing the criteria of 30%. Later in Change preposition
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both sex category had a downfall, except Add a comma
years,
the
category of children.
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increment
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especially
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