The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.

The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
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In terms of introduction, the chart displays the
statisctic
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statistic
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of mankind who intake fruits and
vegies
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in a five
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portions
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in a day in the United Kingdom from 2001 to 2008.
Moreover
, from the day of 2001 till 2006, the percentage criteria of women who
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healthy
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nutrition
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increased
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, later, took a bit downfall in
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two
years. In the UK, in 2001,the women section
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the ratio
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more than 20%. Meanwhile,
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and
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children
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were
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around 16% and 11%. In
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two
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that is
, 2002 and 2003,
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and children sector
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with the result of 2001 with neither any change of a bit. Surprisingly,
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category had much higher
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year
by
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. In the
year
2004,
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,
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section
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toddler came up with action and increase around more than 5%. Both
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rise
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resepctively
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respectively
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under five
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per cent
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. Suddenly, in 2005 and 2006, adult
male
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males
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and adult
female
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females
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became very bullish in consumption, and in 2006,
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section reached
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the milestone by crossing the criteria of 30%. Later in
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two
years
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both sex category had a downfall, except
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category of children.
To conclude
, all groups came up with
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increment
by every
year
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especially
young
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ladies
in the topic of eating vegetables and fruits in a
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. Gradually,
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also
developed
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higher percentage of food between 2001 and 2008.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, two with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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