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The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the places visited by different people living in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of visitors including those who were born in Australia, new migrants born in English-speaking
countries
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 and new migrants born in other
countries
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 going to the zoo, the library, the theatre and the
cinema
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 in
this
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 country.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the total of those who were from English-speaking
countries
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 outnumbered the others. What stands out is that the
cinema
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 appears to be the most attractive place in comparison to the three other destinations.
To begin
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 with, around 70% of native people went to the
cinema
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while
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 only 20% chose the theatre as their favourite place. The number of Australians who visited the zoo and the library was about 42% and 38% respectively.
Similarly
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, the figure for tourists from English-speaking nations visiting the
cinema
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 was
also
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 the highest, accounting for 65%.
However
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, there were about 5% more people from these
countries
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 than native people went to the rest places.
On the other hand
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, tourists from non-English-speaking
countries
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 preferred to visit the library rather than the
cinema
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, making up around 55% and 50% respectively. Approximately 35% of visitors from these nations travelled to the zoo,
whereas
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 only 10% chose to go to the theatre.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, cinema with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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