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The charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when relevant.

The charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison when relevant.
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The bar charts above
shows
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 the various paths taken by UK graduates and
postgraduates
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postgraduate
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students
 after finishing their studies in 2008. There was a very strong tendency for
students
 from both groups to continue their studies
further
, with way higher numbers for the graduates group, almost reaching up to 30,000
students
.
In contrast
 to the high numbers of
students
 pursuing their higher degrees, voluntary work was not as
prefered
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preferred
, having less than 20% of
students
 from both sides taking
this
 path. Rather part-time work was a more common path graduates took after leaving college, almost as favored as doing
further
 study for postgraduates, and just
a
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slightly lower for the other group. In the middle of the trend was the moderate amount of unemployed
students
 from both groups.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graduate and postgraduate students
  • full-time work
  • further study
  • part-time work
  • voluntary work
  • engagement levels
  • trend analysis
  • financial needs
  • social consciousness
  • practical experience
  • personal growth
  • international exposure
  • gap period
  • unemployed
  • economic reasons
  • career paths
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