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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the production of three types of energy in
units
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, coal,
petroleum
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, and natural gas between 1981 to 2000.
Overall
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, it can be seen from the diagram the consumption of
petroleum
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 was higher than the other two,
while
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 coal was the least consumed by the citizens and dramatic fluctuations can be experienced in natural gas,
while
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petroleum
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 and coal declined after oscillations. It is conspicuous that, in 1981
petroleum
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 consumed 90
million
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units
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 and it immediately jumped to 140
million
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units
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 in 1984,
further
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 it was constant till 1987 and from that year it plunged to 100 billion
units
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 in 1990.
Furthermore
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, it swung and augmented touched 140
million
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units
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 in 1996,
in addition
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 after some movements it hit 140
million
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units
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 in 2000. Probing ahead, coal energy was 80
million
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units
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 in 1981, which was almost constant till 1982 and after that, it plummeted and attained 38
million
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units
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 in 1984 after the consumption of coal
was
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increased dramatically and touched 60
million
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units
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 in 1986,
additionally
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, it was partially constant till 1989 and kept declining until reached to 35
million
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units
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 in 2000.
In addition
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, natural gas was nearly 40
million
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units
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 in 1981 after it was unchanged till nine years in 1990,
then
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 it showed an increment gradually and hit 100
million
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units
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 in 2000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units, petroleum, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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