The pie charts below show the percentage of time younger and older people spend on various Internet activities in their free time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time younger and older people spend on various Internet activities in their free time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams compare information about the proportion of time that two different ages(18-26 and 60-70 years old) use the Internet in 6 various activities in their leisure time.
Overall
, Social networking is the main reason that younger use the Internet
also
,
this
item has a large number of older people, but
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booking cinema and travel is really popular for elderly people
instead
teenagers
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of teenagers
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.
According to
the younger chart, young people prefer to use Social networking because it has 24 per
cent
,
then
Accessing music, or film and Researching health data have second level roughly 20 per
cent
.
In addition
, playing games, making purchases, and
making
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booking cinema and travel respectively have a low percentage.
Nevertheless
, for the
old
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generation, we can see a difficult trend, for making booking cinema and travel are really important so that has 25 per
cent
, next they spend a lot of time
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Researching health data and Social networking by approximately 20 per
cent
,
then
Accessing music, or film, making purchases, and playing game. Amazingly, making purchases has the same proportion in both groups.
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