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The chart below shows information about students studying six main subjects at a US university in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows information about students studying six main subjects at a US university in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph above shows the number of female and male
students
 taking several key lessons at a US university in 2010. Data suggests that Finance was the
mostly
Rephrase
most
show examples
 studied subject,
while
 Engineering had the least amount of
students
. Interestingly, both Finance and Engineering were the only courses in which there was little to no difference between the number of female and male
students
. Compared with the second most sought lesson, Accounting,
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 had slightly
less
Correct quantifier usage
fewer
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 male learners.
This
 gap was widening for all the other courses, especially Economics and even greater in Mathematics. For these two latter cases, the proportion was inverted, with male
students
made
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making
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 up almost 50% more of the class in Economics, and more than 100% in Mathematics. In general, classes in which male
students
 were the majority of the learners, had an extreme imbalance of the numbers of female
students
 enrolled in those courses.
On the other hand
, the opposite situation did not result in much of a wide gap
on
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in
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 the quantity of male
students
 in the classes.
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