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You recently stayed in a hotel in a large city. The weather was very unusual for tI time of year and the heating/cooling system in the hotel was quite inadequate. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter give details of what was wrong explain what you had to do to overcome the problem at the time say what action you would like the manager to take

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Dear Sir , Hope you are doing well . I am writing
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 letter to show my dissatisfaction with the service you
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provided
 during our stay in your hotel . Actually , I recently visited your hotel for
one
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week
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one-week
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 stay in the Maldives during the summer time for our business meeting purpose.
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, the room was quite spacious
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the cooling system inside the room was totally inadequate . As
,
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 air
conditionning
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conditioning
 system was not working properly .
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 , the
ouside
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outside
 weather was extremely hot at that time . So,
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 faced a lot of problems during
the
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 stay . To overcome the issue
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, I purchased a small table fan from the market . So,
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 can sleep in a calm environment . Because
,
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for next three to four days have
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continuous
 meeting with the important business clients . I do not want any mess up
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my business deals . What
i
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 want from you , please ensure well in advance , if
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 everything is working properly or not inside the room . Apart from that , please try to refund some amount because of
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 inconvenience . I will wait for your response regarding
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 matter as soon as possible. Yours faithfully , Harjeet
kaur
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coherence and cohesion
Ensure punctuation, such as spaces before and after commas, is used correctly to improve readability.
coherence and cohesion
Double-check for capitalization errors, especially at the beginning of sentences and with proper nouns.
coherence and cohesion
Review grammar and spelling, paying special attention to commonly confused words (e.g., 'continous' should be 'continuous').
task response
Provide more specific details about the duration and impact of the inconvenience to strengthen your argument.
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Adopt a more formal writing tone throughout to maintain professionalism in your letter.
coherence and cohesion
The letter contains a clear structure, addressing the problem, your actions to mitigate it, and the desired outcome.
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You have successfully identified the key points required to complete the task.
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