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The chart below shows what anthrop[ology graduates from one university did after fininshing thier undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after 5 years

The chart below shows what anthrop[ology graduates from one university did after fininshing thier undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after 5 years
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The chart demonstrates the percentage of British students in England
that
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who
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 can speak other languages
in addition
 to
English
 in 2000 and 2010
to begin
with
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with,
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 in 2000 30% of
the
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apply
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British
student
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students
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speaks
Wrong verb form
spoke
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 Spanish that number
increase
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increased
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 in 2010 to 35%
on the other hand
 fringe
have
Wrong verb form
had
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 a percentage of 15% in 2000
creases
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increased
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 to 10% in the year
to
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apply
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2010,
furthermore
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furthermore,
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 The
student
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students
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does
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do
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 not speak. Any languages from
English
 was 20% in 2000 that number
decreases
Wrong verb form
decreased
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 to almost double in 2010 to just 10% more over German stayed the same
with
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at
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 just 10% through the period from 2000 to 2010
to sum up
 majority of British students
speaks
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speak
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 both
English
 and Spanish and both 2000 and 2010
while
 the minority
speaks
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speak
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to
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apply
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other languages
in addition
 to
English
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words english with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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