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The graph shows the monthly expenditure on three types of restaurant food in Australia. The plot shows the annual number of restaurant visits for the same types of food between 1965 and 2015. Summarise the information in the charts and make comparisons where appropriate.

The graph shows the monthly expenditure on three types of restaurant food in Australia. The plot shows the annual number of restaurant visits for the same types of food between 1965 and 2015. Summarise the information in the charts and make comparisons where appropriate.
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The bar graph shows the expenditure of different income groups in
Italian
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,
Indian
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 and
Chinese
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restaurants
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 in Australia,
while
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 the scatterplot shows the
number
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 of annual
visits
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 per
person
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 to the same type of
restaurants
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 between 1965 and 2015. The proportion of money spent on
Chinese
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 and
Italian
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food
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 is similar for high ($42 and $20), medium ($35 and $14) and low ($13 and $8) income groups. As people’s income becomes higher, the proportion of money
that is
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 spent on
Indian
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food
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 drops from being the most to least favoured style of
food
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.
This
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 suggests that
Indian
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food
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 is preferred because it is the least expensive option. In 1970 the total
number
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 of restaurant
visits
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 per
year
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 was approximately 5
visits
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 per
person
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, which was made up of 3 and 2
visits
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 per
person
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 to
Chinese
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 and
Italian
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restaurants
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, respectively. The total remained low until 1985, but after that time increased steadily to around 50
visits
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 per
year
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 by 2015. After 1985, the
number
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 of
visits
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 to
Chinese
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restaurants
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 increased in a continuous upward trend reaching 22
visits
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 per
person
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 per
year
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 by 2015,
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visits
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 to
Italian
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 and
Indian
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restaurants
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initially
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 followed a similar trend but the
number
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 of
visits
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 began to level out after the
year
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 2000 reaching 15 and 12
visits
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 per
person
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 per
year
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 by 2015, respectively. People having higher disposable incomes and less free time are probably the causes of the dramatic change in eating habits.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words italian, indian, chinese, restaurants, number, visits, person, food, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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