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The chart below shows the milk export figures from three European countries between 2008 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the milk export figures from three European countries between 2008 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart gives information regarding sales of
milk
 in 3 different European
nation
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nations
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such
 as Italy,
Russia
 and
Poland
 over 5 years from 2008 to 2012. Looking from an
overall
 perspective,
it is clear that
 the
export
 of
milk
 in
Russia
 more higher
while
Poland
almost
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is almost
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 2-3 times lower than
Russia
. In Italy,
milk
 sales took nearly half
amount
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the amount
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 of Russian
export
.
To begin
 with that in 2008
Russia
 exported no more
that
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than
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 25
millions
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million
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tonnes
whereas
 in Italy approximately 18m
tonnes
 and 13m
tonnes
 in
Poland
 country. Next year
the
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apply
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Poland
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Poland's
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 sales decreased to 8m
tonnes
while
Russia
 took almost 3 times more to compare with data in
Poland
, the
export
 of Italy
no
Verb problem
did not
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chanched
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change
. In 2010 the Russian
export
 of
milk
 increased unbelievably
40
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by 40
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millions
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million
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tonnes
, which means took the top of the list,
however
 in
Poland
 again fell to little more than 5
m
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million
tonnes
 and stayed
the
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at the
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last
 of the list compared
other
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to other
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 years. Italy has no big difference,
grow
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growing
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 to
probabyly
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probably
 20m
tonnes
 in 2010. In 2011
export
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the export
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 of
milk
 in
Russia
 dipped to 39m
tonnes
whereas
 in
Poland
 went up to 13m
tonnes
, Itaky again has no change. In 2012,
Russia
lose
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lost
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 10m
tonnes
 compared with
last
 year,
Poland
 climbed a little no more than 15m
tonnes
, in Ital number stayed
in
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at
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 20
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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tonnes
 and no
changed
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change
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last
 3 years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, whereas, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, russia, poland, export, tonnes, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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