The bar chart below gives information about the number of students studying Computer Science at a UK university between 2010 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below gives information about the number of students studying Computer Science at a UK university between 2010 and 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar diagram depicts the
number
of people who were in the Computer Science department in the years 2010 to 2012 between UK citizens and foreign admissions.
Overall
, it can be seen that UK
women
are in the majority from 2010 to 2012.
Additionally
, male pupils from the UK had a drop in
number
but rose significantly.
To begin
with, the
number
of admissions from abroad
women
was significantly higher than abroad
women
.
For instance
, in 2010
the
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British
female
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had a
number
of
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over 30% which rose steadily and reached a proportion of 45.
In contrast
,
Women
from another country had well under 15% in 2010.
However
, the enrolled
number
rose steadily reaching 20% in the
year
2012.
On the other hand
, men from Britain stood at well over 40% in 2010, but
this
percentage plummeted to 20% in
year
2011.
Furthermore
, the
number
increased to approximately 45 per cent in the final
year
.
Moreover
, the male foreign
student's
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number
showed an upward trend starting at a proportion of 20 where
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is
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increased to reach approximately 40% in the
year
2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, women, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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  • enrolment numbers
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • depicts
  • analyze
  • peak
  • significant
  • comparison
  • subject matter
  • highlight
  • notable
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