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The chart below shows the value of one countries exports in various categories during 2015 in 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.

The chart below shows the value of one countries exports in various categories during 2015 in 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015.
The first bar chart displays
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the numberers of export
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earnings
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 in five kinds in a particular nation in the
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of
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2015 and 2016.The second table provides information about the proportion of
values
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value
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 change in every product.
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 the majority of export
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 was petroleum products and engineered goods,
while
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 the lowest level was textiles. As for the ratio of
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 values, it can be seen textiles had a significant increase.
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, gems and jewellery
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 the only category that saw a decline. Looking at the information in more detail, in 2015, the highest value of export earnings was found in petroleum products at nearly 61
billion
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, followed by engineered goods at around 57
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. It is notable that the value of agriculture
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 similar in 2016, with approximately 31
billion
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 and 32
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, respectively. Moving on to the second table, compared to 2015,the percentage of value in textiles rose 15.25% in 2016, which was more than other items during the given period.
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category that decreased,with 5.18%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export categories
  • percentage change
  • economic implications
  • GDP (Gross Domestic Product)
  • fluctuations
  • international trade relationships
  • top-performing categories
  • least performing categories
  • export values
  • global market trends
  • export priorities
  • economic strategies
  • future prospects
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