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The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph and pie chart display information about the ages of individuals and the types of
crime
 that happened in Britain over the previous year.
According to
 the data, Most younger people, particularly those aged between 16 and 24, had a higher tendency to commit
crimes
 compared to older age groups.
Conversely
, the youngest group,aged 0 to 8, showed the lowest
incident
Replace the word
incidence
show examples
 of recorded
crime
. The most commonly committed
crime
 was violent
crime
,
while
 public order-related
crime
 shared the smallest proportion of total
crime
 incidents. 80% of
crimes
 were committed by people aged 20, which was the highest level compared to any other age group.
This
 was followed by those aged 16 and 24, with a
crime
 rate of 70% and 60% respectively, Individuals aged 28 and above committed
crimes
 ranging from a mere 5% to 20%.
Conversely
, the youngest group,aged between 0 and 8, showed a zero percentage
crime
 rate. The pie chart provides information on the types of
crimes
 happening in the UK. Violent
crimes
 accounted for 46%, representing the largest proportion of total
crimes
. Property-related
crimes
 were slightly higher than drug
crimes
, at 23% and 22% respectively,
while
 public order-related
crimes
 constituted only a small fraction (9%) of the total.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "conversely, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, crimes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • The line graph depicts
  • The pie chart illustrates
  • reveals
  • displays
  • depicts
  • the trend of
  • the overall crime rate
  • steadily decreased
  • the distribution of
  • different types of crime
  • prevalent
  • accounts for
  • the most common crime
  • followed by
  • make up
  • a smaller proportion of
  • the total crimes
  • a smaller percentage
  • approximately
  • the remaining percentage
  • It is important to note that
  • reflects
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