The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The multiple maps compare the vast development of Grange Park from its earliest year to the present.
Overall
, there has been an introduction to new facilities
such
as a water feature, a cafe, an amphitheatre, a children's play area, and a new
entrance
. Other than that, some places have changed their functions,
for instance
, the
fountain
, the pond, the glasshouse, and the musician's stage. In 1920, the
fountain
stood in the centre of the area, with a musician's stage on the western side. The park had two main entrances located in the middle south and north. On the left of the south
entrance
, there were
seats
and rose gardens,
while
on the right, there was a glasshouse and
seats
. Moving to the north
entrance
, the buildings on the left were exactly the same as the south
entrance
.
However
, the right part consisted of a rose garden and a pond. In
this
year, the
seats
were distributed on many sides of the park. In the current state, the
fountain
is demolished and rebuilt into a rose garden surrounded by
seats
on each edge. Now, the
seats
are no longer separated into many areas. The stage
also
redeveloped into an amphitheatre for concerts and the glasshouse became a water feature.
Furthermore
, in the northeast, the rose garden has been changed into a cafe and the pond into a children's play area.
Finally
, there has been construction of a new underground
entrance
located on the west part of the water
fountain
.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words entrance, fountain, seats with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.

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