The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams depict the old structure of a public
park
when it first opened in 1920 and how it is now after some refurbishment.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there is effective utilization of spaces to
further
offer different activities and services for visitors. In 1920, the old
park
contains
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contained
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two entrance gates in the back and front sections, lines of seats in each corner, three rose garden areas,
stage
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a stage
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for musicians and
fountain
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a fountain
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in the middle of the
park
.
Moreover
, a pond for water plants and glasshouse. Currently, the
park
offers
numerious
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numerous
activities, including three entrance gates,
cafe
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a cafe
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shop,
children's
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a children's
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play area, and
water
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a water
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feature. The added gate was meant to direct
visitor
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visitors
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to the
new
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newly
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add
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added
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water feature at the right corner of the
park
. In the right section, there are
also
children's
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a children's
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play area and
cafe
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a cafe
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shop in front of it. In the
middel
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middle
the is a large rose garden surrounded
with
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by
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seats.
In
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On
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the left, there are Amphitheatre for
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the concerts
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concerts
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area and another rose garden. In summary, the new structure
cater
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caters
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for
large
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a large
the large
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number of
visiors
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visitors
, offering them
unique
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a unique
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experience and easy access.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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