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The chart below shows the level of satisfaction of health care system in four countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the level of satisfaction of health care system in four countries in three years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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 the changes
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satisfaction
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the satisfaction
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 level of
health
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 system in four countries (Canada, Netherlands, UK, USA)
in
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 three time points 1991, 1998, and 2006. These four countries could be divided into three groups: decreasing
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satisfaction
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, increasing
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satisfaction
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stable
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 status. The first group
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at
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 Canada and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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. In Canada,
that
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 started with the highest level of
satisfaction
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 of almost 60%, there was
the
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 rapid
falling
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 due 7 years (1991-1998) to
peak
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the peak
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 of 22%, and after that the lightest
improving
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 to 30%. In
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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this
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starting
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 with 48% of
satisfaction
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, from 1991 to 1998 there is
the
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 major rising up to 52%, and after that
decreasing
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decreased
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 to 43%
on
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 2006. The second group includes
USA
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the USA
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, with
starting
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 point of 10%
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satisfaction
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,
with
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increasing gradually to 17%
on
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 1998, and afterwards
it's
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stay
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stays
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 in
stable
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 position
due
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 next 7 years. The third group encompasses
UK
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the UK
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 with
stable
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a stable
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 situation due 15
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years
yeatrs
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years
, unchanged at the level of 28%
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words satisfaction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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