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You have reserved a holiday apartment in the city for your elderly parents and want to confirm the arrangements Write a letter to the rental agency. In your letter: confirm the date and time of your parents' arrival explain the special needs that they have, as an elderly couple say how you will organise your parents' arrival and departure

#holiday #apartment #city #parents #arrangements #agency #date #time #couple #organise #departure
Good morning dear Ana, I hope you are doing great. I am so happy with the help your agency is giving me with
reservation
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the reservation
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 of the apartment for my
parents
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parent's
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 holidays. We are looking forward to
sepnd
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spend
this
 time together. I want to make some clarifications, in order to avoid any possible problem. First of
all
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 they are going to arrive on the
21th
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21st
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. of
december
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December
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 at noon, and they are leaving on the 2 of
january
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January
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 almost at midnight, I hope it won`t be a problem. As you know they are a little old, so we have a few special
request
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requests
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. In
first
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the first
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 place the bed sheets must be 100% cotton
,
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apply
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 since my mom is very allergic to any other fabric, she
also
 needs to drink cold water, so please make sure that the fridge is working well, as for my dad he only needs a good air conditioning, Regarding their arrival and
departure
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departure,
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 your agency doesn`t have to worry since I want to pick them up and
then
 drop them off. Thank you again, Have a great day.
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task achievement
Make sure to proofread your letter for minor grammatical errors and typos, such as 'sepnd' instead of 'spend' and '21th' instead of '21st.'
coherence cohesion
Separate different ideas into distinct paragraphs to improve readability. For instance, different requests for your parents could be in separate paragraphs.
task achievement
The tone is appropriate and polite, showing gratitude to the rental agency.
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The letter includes all the necessary information: arrival and departure dates, special needs, and arrival/departure arrangements.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear logical structure, moving from the introduction to the main points and closing.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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