the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustrated maps represent changes
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occurred
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3 years
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time frame around the roads accessing the City Hospital in 2007 and 2010.
To begin
with, there are three major changes
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observed in
this
time frame.
Firstly
, multiple roundabouts were installed providing easy accessibility to the Hospital.
Secondly
,
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and
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a bus station west to the hospital road using two supporting roads, opposite
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the staff parking.
Thirdly
, the staff parking and public parking are segregated by changing
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location east to the Hospital.
Overall
, It can be observed
the
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some drastic change
occured
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occurred
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between 2007 and 2010, providing
a
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easy
road accessible
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infrastructure in
3 year
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frame.
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