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The table shows the proportion of Australian families that owned certain household appliances in 1995 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the proportion of Australian families that owned certain household appliances in 1995 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates the percentage of households that possessed certain appliances including personal stereos,
computers
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, TV sets, washing
machines
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, refrigerators and hairdryers in Australia in 1995 and 2002.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 TV sets and refrigerators were the two types of household appliances that were favoured the most. What stands out is that
computers
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 experienced a significant increase in demand.
To begin
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 with, in 1995, TV sets and refrigerators accounted for 79% and 18% respectively and became the most popular equipment, followed by washing
machines
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 with 67% of families who owned these
machines
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 . Meanwhile, the figures for those who possessed the three other kinds of
machines
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 were quite low, under 50%, particularly
computers
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 with only 18%.
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, by the turn of the twenty-first century, there were dramatic changes in these numbers.
While
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 most devices rose slightly by around 12% to 23%, the figures for
computers
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 grew sharply to 76% and became the fourth most favourable gadget. Personal stereos were the only devices whose rate was still under 50% in 2002.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words computers, machines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "sets" was used 3 times.
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