the maps below show an industrial area in the town of norbiton, and planned future development of the site

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The pictures demonstrate the future face of industrial space in the town of Norbiton.

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, it can be seen there would be several changes that make the next industrial

area

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become a new place

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more suitable for living,

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the position of

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area

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remains. Today, the industrial

area

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is located in the east of Norbiton town and consists of a

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factory

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complex, a river, and a farmland

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. The

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is placed in the middle of

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space, the river in the north of the

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, and the farmland in the above of the river.

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that,

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location is dominated by a huge flat land

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nothing there. In the future, the industrial

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will be relocated by many buildings and the main aim is to support the humans living there. The

factory

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space would be replaced by some houses, a playground, a school, a medical

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, and shops.

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, the farmland would be renovated by housing

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connected to the road, a new shape of the simple road before.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

178 words

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industrial area
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infrastructure
manufacturing
facilities
transition
planning
commercial
residential
renovation
urban planning
sustainability
environmental impact
local economy
rejuvenation
construction
modernization
accessibility
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the maps below show an industrial area in the town of norbiton, and planned future development of the site

Team activities can teach more skills for life than those activities, which are played alone. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The governments should give each citizen a basic income so that they have enough money to live on, even if they are unemployed. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced number of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Imagine you are a compliance professional charged with ensuring that a doctor’s office is HIPAA-compliant. 1. How would you go about accomplishing that goal? 2. Who would you consult in making a plan? 3. What policies and procedures would you institute?