the maps below show an industrial area in the town of norbiton, and planned future development of the site

the maps below show an industrial area in the town of norbiton, and planned future development of the site
The pictures demonstrate the future face of industrial space in the town of Norbiton.
Overall
, it can be seen there would be several changes that make the next industrial
area
become a new place
that is
more suitable for living,
while
the position of
this
area
remains. Today, the industrial
area
is located in the east of Norbiton town and consists of a
center
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factory
complex, a river, and a farmland
area
. The
factory
is placed in the middle of
this
space, the river in the north of the
factory
, and the farmland in the above of the river.
Besides
that,
this
location is dominated by a huge flat land
that is
nothing there. In the future, the industrial
area
will be relocated by many buildings and the main aim is to support the humans living there. The
factory
space would be replaced by some houses, a playground, a school, a medical
center
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, and shops.
In addition
, the farmland would be renovated by housing
that is
connected to the road, a new shape of the simple road before.
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  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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