A pie chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at lea

A pie  chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at lea
The given chart and table
demonstrates
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about travellers at a specific layoff centre in Australia.
Overall
,
percentage
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the percentage
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of Europeans is the highest,
US
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the US
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is slightly lower,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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amount of Asians is
smallest
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the smallest
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and
other’s
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the other’s
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proportion is twice less than tourists from Europe.
Firstly
,
percent
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per cent
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of visitors from Europe is 37%, and they prefer 16 day holiday by “Camping and Caravan” including bathing,
while
American
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the American
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sightseers
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sightseer's
sightseers'
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proportion is 35
percents
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percent
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and most of them choose
14 day
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14-day
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rest at
4 star
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4-star
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hotel inclusive sightseeing.
Secondly
,
portion
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a portion
the portion
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of Asian travellers is 10%,
whereas
percentage
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the percentage
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of tourists from other countries is 18%. People from Asia prefer 1 week break period at
5 star
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5-star
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hotel which includes sightseeing,
meanwhile
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meanwhile,
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visitors from other countries choose
10 day
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10-day
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rest by “Camping or Caravan”
that
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which
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includes surfing.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • holiday resort
  • demographic data
  • fluctuations
  • peak season
  • off-season
  • noticeable patterns
  • comparative language
  • correlations
  • trends
  • satisfaction ratings
  • dissect
  • recap
  • significent
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