The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and

locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make

comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the result of a survey which
consist
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consists
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of 5 reasons of
people
under and over 30 years of age feel happiness.
Overall
, both under and over thirty years old are most happy when they achieve something at work, it can be seen with the highest portion among other reasons. The
least
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lowest
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percentage is Other factors for both of the young
people
and the elderly. The experiences from not only the
people
over 30 but
also
from the young ones, the data shows that most
people
are happy when they get achievements at work with more than 30% of portion, followed by doing their hobbies with over than 20% of shares. Financial security commanded the third place with 20%
that
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which
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makes the elder
people
happy,
while
having a good appearance comes out as the third place for the young ones. In the fourth place, both generations have different indicators of what makes them happy which is travelling for the generation under 30 and being with family for the older generation.
Furthermore
, the other factors appear as the least indicator compared with others.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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