The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spend their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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This
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bar chart depicts the average information weekly spending
of
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food, housing, fuel, power, clothing, footwear, household goods, personal goods, transport, and leisure. It is clear from the chart that all
presentages
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percentages
of different items was changed in
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both
of
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two years ,except household goods. According
what
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is shown,
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food had the highest figure in 1968 and
its
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it
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accounted for 35%.
Then
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,
this
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proportion decreased significantly to 22% in 2018.
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,
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the
number
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of housing comprised
of
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10% in 1968. After that, the
number
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was
substantional
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substantial
increased to 22%. In 1968,
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fuel and power had the lowest ratio compared with other items and
its
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it
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represented 6%.
Then
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,
this
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presentage
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percentage
present age
was a modest
sinked
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sunk
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to 4%. Future, the
number
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of clothing and footwear accounted for 10% in 1968.
Next,
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this
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number
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dropped to 5% in 2018.
Finally
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, the leisure had the highest
number
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income in 2018.
To sum up
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, we could say that most
the
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presentages
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percentages
percentage
of items were changed,
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however
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however,
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the
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food had the highest
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number of
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income in 1968
while
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in 2018,
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leisure had the highest the
number
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of spending by families.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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