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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart shows the percentage of GDP
that is
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 spent on healthcare in a number of different European
countries
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 over a ten-year
period
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. There is a notable contrast between the different
countries
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' expenditure on their GDP on health, with Switzerland and Belgium spending the largest over the
period
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.
This
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 is compared to Lithuania and Estonia who spend the least, with Switzerland nearly spending 75% more than Estonia as a percentage of each country GDP’s. Over the ten-year
period
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, the percentage spent on health does not change very much with some
countries
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 increasing (Denmark, Poland, Lithuania, Slovenia and Norway). But others were decreasing (France, Netherlands and Luxemburg) what they spent by one
percent
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per cent
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 over the
period
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 and some stayed the same (Spain and Estonia). The Netherlands is the only country whose spending changes by more than
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 degree dropping by two
percent
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per cent
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.
Overall
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, the amount of money spent on healthcare varied dramatically between many of the different
countries
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.
Furthermore
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, it appears that the amount of money spent by a majority of individual European
countries
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 fluctuated between the different years but not by much.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • expenditure
  • percentage
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • comparison
  • notable
  • pattern
  • exceptional
  • deviation
  • neighbouring countries
  • economic policies
  • public health
  • data analysis
  • statistical comparison
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