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You want to arrange a conference for your company, and you need to ask one of your colleagues to give a presentation in this conference. Write a letter to your colleague. In your letter include: 1. Details about the conference- 2. Why you want your colleague to give the presentation – 3. What arrangements you will do for this conference

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Dear Mr. Joe  I hope you are doing great. I am
wraiting
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writing
this
 letter to inform you that we are going to have a conference and I want you to prepare a presentation for it. It going to be on next Monday
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15 of April, it will begin at 11:30am and end at 2:30pm. I choose you for
this
 task due the fact that you are really good in your job so that I trast you.
Furthermore
, I hope you to do your best in
this
 presentation, because it is an extremely important presentation. The arrangement that you presented it is the pros and cons of our new product
moreover
, the design of the product. Hance, I want you to be clear
while
 you prepare it
also
, want you to consider af all the advantages and disadvantages af the product. Your boss ms. Reem
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spelling and grammar
Make sure to carefully proofread your letter for spelling and grammatical errors. For example, 'wraiting' should be 'writing' and 'trast' should be 'trust'.
fluent expression
Include more detailed explanations for why the presentation is extremely important and what specific aspects need to be highlighted.
clarity
You clearly outline the purpose of the letter and give specific details about the conference's date and timing.
writing tone
The tone of the letter is polite and professional, which is very fitting for a workplace context.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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