The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The table illustrates the proportion of monthly household income five European countries spend on food and drink, housing, clothing and entertainment. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The given table illustrates the
the
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household income in five
countries
that is
spent on
food
and drink ,housing, clothing and entertainment.
It is clear that
U.K. Workers spend the most on housing with 37%
due to
the high population compared to
size
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the
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country
To begin
with
food
and drink, Turkey takes first as
highest
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nation that
spend
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on it with 37%
percent
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per cent
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of their gross income,
However
, Germany is the least country that spends on
food
and drinks, probably because German's farming and agriculture
is
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more developed than Turkish's,
Nonetheless
, German employees spend on clothing and entertainment more than all the other
countries
in the table above.
Secondly
, Spain and Turkey pay the lowest
on
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housing,
due to
low
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the low
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demand
on renting
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in the two
countries
,
In addition
, Spain and France are
also
the least
countries
that
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workers spend their money on clothing.
To conclude
, the prices of
food
and drinks
is
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the highest in Spain and Turkey
due to
the
significant
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high percentage of their income
that is
spent on it.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to, that is".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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