The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The bar chart below reveals the top ten countries for the consumption and production of electricity in 2014.
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, all of the countries produced equivalently to their consumption. China is leading the top, staying
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the first place.
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country produced 5398 billion
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and consumed a little less, 5322 billion kWh of electricity. Russia had the least amount of difference in supply and demand. Germany was
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only country with a consumption rate of electricity being higher than
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rate.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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