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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000.
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The supplied graph represents the production levels of the main fuels in the United Kingdom from 1981 to 2000.
Overall
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, the figure obviously outlines that there was an upward trend for natural gas ,
as well as
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, a downward trend for coal and petroleum had a slight
fluctuaion
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fluctuation
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. As regards the
first,
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petroleum
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the petroleum
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 level started from 90
energy
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 units in 1981 ,
then
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 it rose to 140 in 1986. By the end of the
year
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, the
energy
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 unit had dropped to one hundred, and since 1991, there have been tiny declines over the nine years, reaching one hundred and forty
energy
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 units.
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, from 1981 to 1991, the number of natural gas was forty,
along with
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, it remained so for three years. From
1991
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the 1991
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year
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, production levels of
the
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apply
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natural gas gradually increased to 80 in 1996 and 100 in 2000.
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,
the
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coal had the average unit of
energy
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 compared to the two fuels, and it began in the eighties and halved by the middle of the
year
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 to 40.
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, the decline in coal production was clearly noticeable and throughout the years, it fell slightly each
year
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declines" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • overall decline
  • depletion
  • shift in energy policies
  • global oil prices
  • extraction technology
  • cleaner energy sources
  • technological advancements
  • investment in nuclear energy
  • diversification
  • traditional fossil fuels
  • sustainable options
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