The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts
illustartes
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illustrates
illustrate
the improvement of tools
of
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for
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Stone
cut
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cutting
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and how it
affect
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affected
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in
stone age
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Stone Age
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in two different
period
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periods
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.
Overall
, in the past people
use
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used
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cutting tools which take out a big part
from
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of
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Stone
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the Stone
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specifically
middle
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the middle
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side.
Moreover
,
at
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in
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the
last
period
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period,
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there
is
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was
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a significant improvement
of
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in
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cutting tools,
while
side
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the side
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view
thiner
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was thiner
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than in
first
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the first
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period.
In a
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A
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one million and four
hounderd
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hundred
years
ago
Stone
shapes in cutting
was
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were
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semi tringular, which means in both
front
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the front
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and back
view
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views
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there shape was thin
in
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at
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first 5 cm
then
got wider.
In eight
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Eight
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hounderd
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hundred
years
ago there was
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a different
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different
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difference
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in cutting
Stone
, were
both
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the
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front and back
view
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views
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bigger than
Stone
in
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apply
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1.4 million
years
ago , but there side
view
was thinner than
it
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apply
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in
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apply
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1.4
millions
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million
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years
ago.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words stone, view, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stone Age
  • tools
  • cutting
  • development
  • rudimentary
  • sophisticated
  • progression
  • unworked pebbles
  • flake tools
  • bifacial tools
  • efficiency
  • materials
  • emergence
  • characteristics
  • functionality
  • craftsmanship
  • precision
  • hunting
  • carving
  • advancements
  • significance
  • human development
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