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The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts
illustartes
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illustrates
illustrate
 the improvement of tools
of
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for
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Stone
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cut
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cutting
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 and how it
affect
Wrong verb form
affected
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 in
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stone age
Correct your spelling
Stone Age
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 in two different
period
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periods
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.
Overall
Linking Words
, in the past people
use
Wrong verb form
used
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 cutting tools which take out a big part
from
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of
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Use synonyms
Stone
Correct article usage
the Stone
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 specifically
middle
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the middle
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 side.
Moreover
Linking Words
,
at
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in
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 the
last
Linking Words
period
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period,
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 there
is
Wrong verb form
was
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 a significant improvement
of
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in
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 cutting tools,
while
Linking Words
side
Correct article usage
the side
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view
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thiner
Add a missing verb
was thiner
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 than in
first
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the first
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 period.
In a
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A
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 one million and four
hounderd
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hundred
years
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 ago
Stone
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 shapes in cutting
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 semi tringular, which means in both
front
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the front
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 and back
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view
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views
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 there shape was thin
in
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at
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 first 5 cm
then
Linking Words
 got wider.
In eight
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Eight
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hounderd
Correct your spelling
hundred
years
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 ago there was
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a different
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different
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difference
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 in cutting
Stone
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, were
both
Correct determiner usage
the
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 front and back
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view
Fix the agreement mistake
views
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 bigger than
Stone
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in
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apply
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1.4 million
years
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 ago , but there side
view
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 was thinner than
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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in
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apply
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1.4
millions
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million
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years
Use synonyms
 ago.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stone, view, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "improvement" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Stone Age
  • tools
  • cutting
  • development
  • rudimentary
  • sophisticated
  • progression
  • unworked pebbles
  • flake tools
  • bifacial tools
  • efficiency
  • materials
  • emergence
  • characteristics
  • functionality
  • craftsmanship
  • precision
  • hunting
  • carving
  • advancements
  • significance
  • human development
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