The diagram below shows the development of cutting tools in the Stone Age. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts
illustartes
the improvement of tools Correct your spelling
illustrates
illustrate
of
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for
Stone
Use synonyms
cut
and how it Replace the word
cutting
affect
in Wrong verb form
affected
Use synonyms
stone age
in two different Correct your spelling
Stone Age
period
.
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periods
Overall
, in the past people Linking Words
use
cutting tools which take out a big part Wrong verb form
used
from
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of
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Stone
specifically Correct article usage
the Stone
middle
side. Correct article usage
the middle
Moreover
, Linking Words
at
the Change preposition
in
last
Linking Words
period
there Add a comma
period,
is
a significant improvement Wrong verb form
was
of
cutting tools, Change preposition
in
while
Linking Words
side
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the side
view
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thiner
than in Add a missing verb
was thiner
first
period.
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the first
In a
one million and four Change preposition
A
hounderd
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hundred
years
ago Use synonyms
Stone
shapes in cutting Use synonyms
was
semi tringular, which means in both Correct subject-verb agreement
were
front
and back Correct article usage
the front
Use synonyms
view
there shape was thin Fix the agreement mistake
views
in
first 5 cm Change preposition
at
then
got wider.
Linking Words
In eight
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Eight
hounderd
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hundred
years
ago there was Use synonyms
Correct article usage
a different
different
in cutting Replace the word
difference
Stone
, were Use synonyms
both
front and back Correct determiner usage
the
Use synonyms
view
bigger than Fix the agreement mistake
views
Stone
Use synonyms
in
1.4 million Change preposition
apply
years
ago , but there side Use synonyms
view
was thinner than Use synonyms
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
in
1.4 Change preposition
apply
millions
Change to singular
million
years
ago.Use synonyms
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