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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The given line graph illustrates the ratio of
Australian
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Australia
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 exporting goods with Japan,
US
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the US
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,
China
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 and
India
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 from 1990 to 2012.
Overall
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, Japan and US markets experienced a downward trend,
while
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it
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apply
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to
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China
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 and
India
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 witnessed an increase over the given period. A closer look at the graph shows the percentage of
product
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products
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 exported to Japan started at the highest, out of the 4 countries (at over 25%).
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, it steadily decreased over the 12 years and hit rock bottom at about 16%.
Secondly
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,
US
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the US
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 market was deemed to have fluctuations as it began with over 10% in the first year, fluctuated up and down and ended with more than 5% in 2012.
China
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 and
India
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 markets had the same starting point at roughly 3%. Both have shown a positive trend. The ratio of exported Australian goods to
China
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 increased rapidly over the years,
reached
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reaching
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 the highest record at about 27% in 2012, and the same to
India
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 was 5% in the same year.
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