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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
The table chart illustrates the
amount
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 of
goods
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 carried by different types of transportation (
road
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,water, rail, and pipeline) in the United Kingdom between 1974 and 2002.
Overall
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,the highest
amount
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 of
goods
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transported
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was transported
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on
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by
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road
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 ,and there was
increase
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an increase
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 in the
amount
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 of
goods
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 carried by
road
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 and
on
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by
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 boat over the given period.
While
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 the lowest
amount
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 of
goods
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 transported by pipeline. On the one hand, the number of
goods
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 carried on the
road
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 was around 70
million
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tonnes
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 in 1974
,
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and dramatically increased to just under 100 in 2002.
While
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 the
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amount
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number
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 of
goods
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 carried on
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the boat
a boat
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boat
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boats
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 was under 40
millions
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million
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tonnes
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in
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at
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 the beginning of the period, by 19869 it had increased to about 60
million
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tones
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tonnes
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, before it dropped to about 50
million
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tonnes
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, and increased to above 60
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
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, the number of
goods
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 transported by pipeline was the lowest under 10
millions
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million
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 in 1974
then
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 gradually increased to above 20
million
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tonnes
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 in 1982, and slightly decreased to exactly 20
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.
while
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goods
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 carried by rail started at 40
million
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tonnes
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 and remained the same over the period given.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, goods, road, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freight transportation
  • logistics
  • modal share
  • tonnage
  • volumes of goods
  • to transport
  • to surpass
  • to decline
  • to fluctuate
  • steady increase/decrease
  • to peak
  • to plateau
  • significant growth/drop
  • to outstrip
  • transportation sector
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