The graph shows the number of fatal injuries (resulting in death) of workers in New Zealand between 1992 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the number of workers in New Zealand who experienced fatal

injuries

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resulting in death in 1992 and 2011.

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, roadway incidents accounted for the highest percentage of fatal

injuries

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in both years,

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drowning had the lowest percentage. In detail, roadway incidents represented the highest cause of fatal

injuries

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, with just under 20% in 1992, increasing to just under 25% in 2011. Homicides were responsible for around 16% of fatalities in 1992, decreasing significantly to around 10% in 2011. Falls to lower levels were the third most common cause, affecting about 7% of workers in 1992 and rising slightly to just over 10% in 2011.

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injuries

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caused by contact with electricity and suicides both remained under 5% in 1992 and 2011. Drowning incidents

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remained minimal, with under 5% in both years.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

137 words

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The graph shows the number of fatal injuries (resulting in death) of workers in New Zealand between 1992 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

People now overuse technology, which induces negative effects, do you agree or disagree?

In some cultures, children are often told that thy can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

School children are becoming far too dependent on computers. This is having an alarming effect on reading and writing skills. Teachers need to avoid using computers in the classroom at all costs and go back to teaching basic study skills. Do you agree or disagree?

Write a letter to your supervisor requesting to change your work schedule. In your letter: - explain current schedule; - why you want to change it; - say what kind of schedule you need.