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The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The given bar chart illustrates the shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States,United Kingdom, Japan and Canada in the year 2009,
It is clear that
 the U.S has the highest expenditure on Housing with an approximate percentage of 26%. First of all, Japan
seem
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 to have a high cost of food
due to
 the significant rate of spending on food,
However
, Japan's transportation
shares
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 is the least
from
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among
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 all five countries.
Secondly
, the
U.S
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U.S.
 and the
U.K
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U.K.
 spend the most on clothing compared to other countries in the bar chart,
this
 means that clothing
advertisement
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 is
effectiveness
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effective
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 in these two nations.
To conclude
, every country should have an
exaggerate
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 cost for some services
due to
 increased demand from one period to another.
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