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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The police shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisions where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one are of Britain. The police shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisions where relevant.
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Two pie charts and the table describe
dividing
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 of the police budget in one area of Britain between different proposes and sources in 2017 and 2018. The budget encompasses three sources which are National Government, Local Taxes and others like grants.
And after
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 getting the money it shares
for
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three main aims: Salaries for officers and staff, Technology, and Building and transport. The paramount part of the money obtains from the government with
lightly
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 increasing from 2017 to 2018 (175.5
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millions
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million
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of
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pounds
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 and 177.8
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millions
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million
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of
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pounds
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 respectively). The second source is the local taxes, which
rised
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rose
raised
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 significantly from 2017 to 2018 (91.2
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millions
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million
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of
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pounds
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 and 101.3
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millions
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million
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of
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pounds
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 respectively). The
last
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 one is the line that called others (grants etc.) that mainly stayed stable (38
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millions
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million
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of
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pounds
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 and 38.5
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millions
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million
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of
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pounds
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 respectively). The essential part of the money
spends
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is spent
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for
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on
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wage
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wages
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 of officers and staff, with declining of 6% from 2017 to 2018 (75% and 69% respectively). The second part is the maintenance of the buildings and transport,
that
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 stayed unchanged - 17%. And the
last
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 one - technologies - gained from 8% in 2017 to 14% in 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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