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The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart shows information about the favorite subjects of students from two middle schools, school A and school B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The given column graph illustrates information about the
favorite
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favourite
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subjects
 of
students
 from two middle schools,
school
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schools
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 A and
B
, It is obvious that
students
 in
school
 A prefer sports more than
students
 in
school
B
 do.
According to
 the bar chart,
school
 A
students
 don't prefer both drawing and a foreign language,
whereas
school
B
's
students
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students'
student's
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 most
favorite
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favourite
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subjects
 are drawing and a language, completely opposite to
schhol
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school
 A
students
.
Secondly
,social science is the only subject that the
amount
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number
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 of
students
 picked in the two schools
are
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is
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 considered close. In conclusion,
School
B
students
 don't prefer essential
subjects
,
for instance
, science and sports,
Nonetheless
,
schools
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school
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 A
students
 seem to be more comfortable with essential
subjects
,
In addition
,
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words subjects, students, school, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • comparative data
  • favorite subjects
  • middle schools
  • horizontal axis
  • vertical axis
  • quantifies
  • preference
  • initial observation
  • significantly greater interest
  • shared enthusiasm
  • favored
  • attracts more students
  • draws the highest number
  • popularity
  • outliers
  • subject preferences
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